I keep thinking about my Project 1 and I’m pretty sure my next [rhetorical] move to revise it will be to clarify the scenery in the text, and expose the telling of the tale more deeply. The end result of the first draft, while compelling, was muddled and diffuse. The description of Fran’s search for Daniel was not nearly as compassionate as it should have been, and instead came across as rushed. The location was not described well enough, and there should be more time devoted to explaining the community’s shock at a kidnapping. Once again, the piece is rushed. My next move will be to slow the pace of the borrowed memoir and to devote more time to clearly explaining the happenings.